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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 3, 2005 20:19:22 GMT -5
Yes, but that's what I liked. I love when Roy creates fire by just snapping his fingers. I wish I could do that. Which was the last episode you've seen so far?
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Post by Anonymous on Jun 3, 2005 20:24:19 GMT -5
ionizing atoms...hm...ya know i think it'd be impossible to make a change like that at an atomic level with only your hand and give it enough energy to raise it to that voltage......but that'd be nice if someone could really do that....i know a few people who deserve to be practiced on...heheh....
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 3, 2005 20:29:27 GMT -5
Actually I have this crazy theory that combines Alchemy and Spiritual (or is it Spirit?) Energy. I'll explain that later on the story. But also I believe that Yusuke's revival may be by the use of Alchemy, if you merge FMA and YYH. He could have "fixed" his soul to his body.
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Post by Anonymous on Jun 3, 2005 20:39:44 GMT -5
oh kewl ;D would you mind messaging me ith your theory? i honestly can't wait...
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 7, 2005 19:04:27 GMT -5
Mmmm..... I've read your replies and I've fixed some "horrors". I would have updated this sooner but I had final exams, a FCE course and I'm sick. Also I had this problem with posting this chapter. So now I have to divide this chapter in 2 parts. This is the first part of the chapter 4.
Disclaimer: I don't own anything.
I dedicate this to my friend Giovanna, who was bound hand and foot to her seat today. To make matters worse she was filmed. But that was really funny. I wish you had seen that.
NAA: National Alchemist Army (Part One)[/i]
“An alchemist is a person who uses alchemy. Alchemy is, in simple words, the ability to change the things to create new things. The alchemists do this by changing internal structures.” Koenma explained. The Reikai Tantei were listening carefully. Many questions were running through their heads. “Botan told us that. But why are they dangerous?” the impatient punk detective asked.
“First of all most alchemist belong to the NAA, which means National Alchemist Army. Every alchemist’s dream is to enter this organization, but they have very strict rules and joining them is very difficult. You have to be the best.” Koenma said
“But how is that related…” started Kuwabara.
“They have the best alchemists in the world. Also they have many resources and money. This makes them a very powerful organization. They have so much power that they can be a strong enemy in a battle against youkai armies, like Mukuro’s and Yomi’s.” Koenma cut off.
“That’s impossible! We’ve fought against them but individually, but still we had trouble, how can mere humans be a problem against youkai power!” Yusuke yelled.
“The answer is simple: Alchemy. Those humans have mastered almost all the secrets of alchemy. They can do impressive things, such as the electric rings that girl used. Reikai has an opinion about alchemy. Humans must not mess with things too dangerous. They don’t fully understand the impact of alchemy.” Koenma explained.
“I’m getting confused now” said Kuwabara.
“Humans use alchemy, but don’t realize the effects of their use. Also they use it without care and many lives have been sacrificed.”<br> “When, how?” Yusuke asked.
“In the last war. The massacre of the Shinkas”<br>
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Meanwhile… “Helena’s POV”<br> “Helena, what we fear is coming” a man said.
“I think it’s my fault” I say, looking down.
“No, it’s not your fault. This was supposed to be sooner or later. Don’t take all the credit.” he said.
He is the Brigadier General of the NAA. His name is Alexander Slovensky. He’s 6’0 and has gray eyes and black-bluish hair. He’s really attractive, but also very cold towards people. He is one of the few people I really trust here in the NAA.
“What do we have to do?” I asked.
“Wait, for now. We can’t get involved till the situation clears.”<br> “Uh, Brigadier…” I started.
“I already know about that. But you have created some problems, if we plan to continue with the plan. Don’t do anything stupid. Wait for now.”<br> “Hai!” I said, making the typical salute when your superior is talking to you, and giving you orders. Then I start to walk away.
“Wait, Colonel Ayanami”<br> “Yes?”<br> “Take care and clean yourself”<br>
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- “The massacre of the Shinkas?” asked a now very, very confused Yusuke. “And when did that happen? added Kuwabara
“Hn. It surprises me how stupid you two can be.” said Hiei.
“Hey shrimp don’t say that, we’re not stupid!” said Kuwabara
“Really, you should know that some things may be hidden. What you are thought at school isn’t all true. Many things are hidden or changed. The ones who change them have their reasons.”<br> “Kuwabara, Hiei is right. Due to safety reasons many things have been hidden, so that the dark things a person, organization or even a government does don’t make them or him lose popularity or power. What you learn in school is the half truth of everything. There’s more than you think about the wars, for example. But your governments consider that this information is too dangerous for the people. Ignorance is a way of controlling large masses.” explained Koenma.
Kuwabara and Yusuke shut up. Knowing now that what they thought to be all the truth was only small pieces of it wasn’t very comforting in a very confusing situation.
“As I was saying, this massacre was done in a very dangerous area.” continued Koenma. “Shinka is a country between a barrier of mountains and a large sea. Getting there is very difficult, but also escaping. The NAA wanted to control that area, since they have an unstable government. They did it by force, using alchemy. One day some people who didn’t agree with the ideals and beliefs of the NAA proposed a rebellion. It had place, but was annihilated by the forces. To prevent another rebellion, the NAA killedthe majority of the population. Women and children, elder and sick people, all were killed without hesitation. People doesn’t know about this, of course. This is the worst massacre since the Holocaust, and it’s taped in the Black Chapter.”<br> A deadly silence took place. Something so cruel that is considered the worst since the Holocaust? And what about this new enemy. They didn’t want to admit that they were scared. Scared of an enemy that kills their own kind without mercy. Youkai are different. They kill because life is somewhat different. But humans? Humanity was supposed to have learnt from their mistakes, but this NAA changed all the view of their learning.
Koenma broke the silence. “But that’s not all. Although this is a forbidden knowledge and anyone who does it is one of the worst sinners, humans, well some alchemists have been studying this with chaotic results and more deaths to add. Also they are pretending to use it in military terms.”<br> “What is so dangerous? And how can somethingbe that bad to beof the worstsinners?” asked Yusuke, in a half confident, half sarcastic tone. But the truth was that this was only to give himself more confidence in believing this was a bad joke. Forbidden knowledge? Worst sinners? NAA? This had to be a bad joke.
“Human transmutation”<br> This ends Part One. The rest of the chapter will be on the next post. Don't forget my request. And thank you for reading this. ;D
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 7, 2005 19:20:19 GMT -5
Here's Part Two. This Part is dedicated to "Little Pony", who like Giovanna, was bound hand and foot to her seat. The bad thing: the Principal came in and was going to send her with the Maths teacher. The good thing: he didn't notice she was tied and someone else went.
NAA: National Alchemist Army (Part Two)[/i]
“Helena’s POV” As I’m bandaging my wounds in the infirmary I think of the battle Koenma’s detectives and I had. I didn’t realize till now that Kurama used a special powder in that battle. That made me feel tired. I almost lost all my energy. I think it was luck that I had the perfect amount to perform a little alchemy. Since I was in the cell I didn’t have energy, but I was gaining some as time passed. Luckily Koenma’s talk helped me to recharge a little.
My thoughts are interrupted.
“Colonel?” I turn and see Second Lieutenant Akima Takiyama. It’s funny, this is the Alchemist Army, but some officers aren’t alchemists. That’s why they won’t have a goodrank here. Alchemists have ranks:they start asMajors and depending on their success they are promoted. Anyways Takiyama is one of the few women here, including me. We are no more than 20. She has been here since I joined the NAA. She’s a woman in her middle thirties, blond and with brown eyes. She’s one of the officers in my part of the brigade. She gave me advises about my behavior here. I like her, but I can’t be her friend. Friendship doesn’t exist.
“Yes?” I say.
“Brigadier General Slovensky wants to see you.”<br> “Tell him that I’m going, but I have to do something first.”<br> “Hai”<br> This was too soon.
-------------------------------------------------------------------------------- “Human transmutation? What is that?” asked Yusuke. “It is the use of alchemy in order to revive humans. Sometimes it's used to change humans’ characteristics and adding them other species’ characteristics.”<br> “And how can they use that?” asked Kuwabara.
“Baka” started Hiei. “They can change the humans in order to fight more efficiently in a war. Normal humans aren’t a match to transmuted humans.”<br> This made Kuwabara froze. Hiei wasn't joking. Finally he was getting the idea.
For almost 10 minutes nobody talked
“I’ve made my decision. I’m going to stop the NAA!” said Yusuke abruptly.
“Weren’t you listening! They are too dangerous, even for you. When you rush the things you tend to make mistakes.”<br> As Koenma and Yusuke started arguing, Kurama and Hiei had a mental chat.
/Kurama, you’re still too quiet, you’re not acting like yourself./
/Hiei, I’m thinking about this accidents. Everything doesn’t fit correctly./
/Then why don’t you ask your girlfriend/
/Since when you knew about Ayanami-chan? And she is not my girlfriend./
/Since she appeared./
“Why don’t you let the kid fight against the NAA, Koenma. Are you afraid we hurt him?” a voice in the shadows interrupted the fights and chats.
“Who the hell are you!” spat Yusuke
“How soon they forget. I will present myself but first Koenma why don’t you look at the stupid TV you have to “supposedly check Ningenkai.” said the voice sarcastically.
As Koenma was turning it on, an image appeared on it.
A man, in his late 20’s was on the screen. He was wearing an uniform similar to the one Helena Ayanami was wearing when they fought her. It was dark blue, the raincoat and the trousers. He wore also boots, like Ayanami. He had brown hair and amber eyes. He was really pale and he seemed very tall and thin.
“So Koenma, it’s a pleasure to meet you” said the man coolly.
“Who are you? And why are you wearing the same uniform the rare girl was using?” asked, well, yelled Yusuke.
“The girl, ah Ayanami. Well we both belong to the NAA, but let’s say I don’t get on with her.”<br> “So, what do you want, mister? And how is Helena involved?” asked Kurama, which surprised Yusuke, Koenma and Kuwabara.
“Ah, presentations. My name is something you don’t need to know. And Helena, your girlfriend right, well I don’t know what she’s doing now. She doesn’t work with me. But there’s something you need to know…”
An image of a destroyed village popped up on the screen.
“Thisare the things that were left from the attack to Shinka. In a month some parts of the world will look like this. Take it as a revenge Koenma. We know what you have done, so consider this as a kind gift of the NAA. Don’t worry, we won’t let the people suffer too much.” he said and laughed evilly.
“You’re crazy!” Kuwabara said.
“Maybe, but it doesn’t matter. Let’s say this is just a warning. I would suggest surrendering to us. If you do that maybe we may skip this little act. If you don’t, well you will have to make a little space for the new “habitants” of Reikai”<br> “And I almost forget to tell this: Ayanami, if you get involved in this, you will pay”<br> With that the images disappeared.
“How can we stop them Koenma? I thought you were kidding but that man was an alchemist, right? I must now stop him.” Yusuke said and started walking away, getting ready to fight. But he was stopped by Kurama.
“Yusuke, do you know which cities they will attack? And how will you stop them?”<br> Yusuke froze. He hadn’t thought in that.
“Well, it seems that the baka detective doesn’t know what he’s going to fight against?” said the voice in the shadows.
“Show yourself!” said Koenma. With the new warning he was really scared.
A young girl popped out of the shadows. She was wearing a NAA uniform and had medium black-purplish hair and aqua eyes. Everyone was looking at her.
“Hello again Koenma:” said the girl.
“Who are you?” asked Hiei, but he already knew the answer.
“My name is Helena Ayanami.”<br> Well that was Chapter Four. Don't forget my request and tell me your opinions about this chapter. ;D And don't get tied up.
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Post by Taya-chan on Jun 7, 2005 19:27:40 GMT -5
Another masscare!!! Whee!! *falls on head* Well, that was, kinda, the last thing I read. Can't talk or read right now, really, writing story due tommorow.
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Post by Doggy-chan on Jun 7, 2005 19:31:20 GMT -5
Yeah, really good.^^ ...Dang! I g2g... this thunder storms getting worse. >.> Byez!
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Post by Anonymous on Jun 7, 2005 20:29:54 GMT -5
wow that's a long story ^.^'...
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 7, 2005 20:35:31 GMT -5
^_^' Eeehhh, that's just the beginning... I have too much imagination. But I'm faster imagining things than writing them.
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Post by Anonymous on Jun 8, 2005 15:39:22 GMT -5
i have a novel to write...although im quite sure that ill get sick of it as soon as i start...just like all the others.....
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 8, 2005 17:56:39 GMT -5
Heh heh, I only want to write all the story. My principal priority is to finish writing it. I do like what I'm writing and I'm open to listen to any kind of thoughts about it. With this I mean to OOCness or mistakes. Also you can tell me if you like it or not. But about changing the story or settings, I'm not sure about that. Believe me I have all the ideas in my head. I just need to look up for some things and write them.
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 8, 2005 21:41:36 GMT -5
Here's chapter 5. See my notes at the end of Part Two.
Explanations and Alliances (Part One)[/i]
“Helena Ayanami? Wasn’t she the person the crazy man mentioned a minute ago?” asked Kuwabara stupidly. “Your stupidity amuses me. I thought you seemed dumb, but are you sure your mother didn’t drop you when you were a child? And your name is…?” demanded Helena.
“Why should we tell you our names?” asked Yusuke. The rest of the gang took a defensive position.
“Touka Koukan” she answered softly.
“What!” spat Yusuke.
“Touka Koukan” she repeated and slightly annoyed.
“And what the heck is that!” Yusuke didn’t like her and he wasn’t going to stand her attitude after what she had done.
She rolled her eyes and said ”It’s the law of Equivalent States or Equivalent trade, whatever you want to call it. You have to give something to receive another thing and both must value the same. I warned you about the electric rings and gave you my name. That must be enough. Also I know him.” And she pointed Kurama.
“Could you please tell us what are you doing here?” Koenma asked carefully. He was afraid she would do something that would hurt the gang and him.
She frowned. “It seems that you can’t understand a simple law, which rules our worl…, no, the three worlds. I gave you my name, so you now have to tell me your names. Then, if you‘re lucky, I can answer your question.”<br> “They are Yusuke, Kuwabara, Hiei, Koenma.” Kurama pointed each guy as he mentioned their names. “Finally, I’m Kurama, and I don’t think you know me.” He added coolly.
“In that case, I don’t think you know me too.”<br> Now more questions were passing through Kuwabara and Yusuke’s heads. How does she “know” Kurama?
“Anyways, I have to answer your question. Not because I want, but my superior told me to.”<br> She looked at Kurama and said “And could you tell your friend that if he wants answers, he must sheathe his katana.” Hiei had unsheathed his katana and was ready to attack Helena if she made a wrong movement.
After hearing her, Hiei did what she asked, not that he wanted, though.
“So onna, are you happy? Now answer the question.” Hiei demanded.
She just ignored Hiei and sat on Koenma’s desk.
“Koenma, you asked me what I was doing here. Well, baka, I’m here to help you. In case you haven’t noticed, there’s a psycho out there who will destroy cities in 30 days.”<br> “Why would you care?” Hiei said.
“We know what did the NAA. Are you going to pretend you are nice and good and will help that people? We’re not idiots.” Yusuke added.
“I don’t think you should talk for everyone.” she commented. “I am aware of what the NAA has done. But think about this, some people in the NAA don’t want another massacre. We have to stop this discreetly. I’m here representing them.”<br> “Why should we believe you? Correct me if I’m wrong, but some hours ago we had to fight you.” Kurama said.
“Maybe because I’m the only person that knows that baka’s plan. His name is Aoi Katsuragi and he’s General of the South-Eastern Sector of the NAA. That means he controls the NAA quarters of Kitakyushu, Fukuoka, Nagasaki, Kumamoto, Miyazaki, Kagoshima, Hiroshima, Oita and Kyushu. He has all those quarters under his control and probably he will receive completely help from the personnel. He has a lot of influence in the Führer’s decisions. Also he has some allies in the head and north quarters.”<br> “How do you know that?” asked Kuwabara.
“Well, being Colonel has it’s advantages. You have access to some confidential information. Also it’s a great advantage to work for the Brigadier General. He told me what was happening and sent me. But I have to be discreet, if anyone knows about this Alexander’s going to be in a huge trouble. Unfortunately, I think you have told the enemy about my presence.” she said and appeared not too happy.
“How would he know that?” asked Yusuke. “We didn’t know your name then.” He was starting to believe her, even if he didn’t want to.
“You didn’t but Kurama did. Also you asked him about the uniform. I’m the youngest in all the quarters. I think he was suspicious about Alexander and me, so maybe he sent someone to follow me. Also it’s not very common in the NAA to have girls in their troops. He’s not stupid. Now I have to be careful.”<br> “Who’s this Alexander?” asked Koenma. He was now interested, though she still was a potential enemy for them.
“Alexander Slovensky, Brigadier General of the headquarters.” After seeing Kuwabara’s I-don’t-understand look she added “That means that he is one of the most important and respected military men in the NAA. But that doesn’t mean he has a lot of power. I work for him.”<br> “You said you were going to help us, how are you going to do that, onna?” asked Hiei.
“You shouldn’t talk to your superiors like that, I have a name and you know it, so call me by my name. Anyways you didn’t pay attention to the message he sent. We knew that he was planning on destroying cities as a revenge of the Shinka massacre. But we didn’t know which ones were going to be destroyed.” said Helena
“But you destroyed Shinka and killed all the people, why should you take revenge?” asked a now more confused Yusuke.
“Yes, the NAA destroyed a part Shinka, but not all Shinka. You think we killed everyone, but my investigations tell me that’s not correct. And Katsuragi’s message confirms my beliefs.”<br> “Explain onna” Hiei demanded
“Koenma why you didn’t tell them” she said coolly as she turned to see the young prince of Reikai, which was in his teenager form. After not getting any response she continued. “First of all the message had 9 symbols. In my research I found out that those were the symbols of each soldier that destroyed a part of Shinka. I couldn’t get their real names, but each one had an specific zone to destroy. Koenma I need a map of Shinka and a marker, please.”<br> Koenma order the ogre George to bring him what Helena asked.
When she got them she drew on the map a circle with some lines on it. In some sections she drew a strange symbol.
“The circle you see is a transmutation circle. It let us Alchemists perform a transmutation. It is also the symbol of the NAA. The region of Shinka was divided in 13 parts, like the circle shows. The NAA planned on destroying 9 of the 13 sections. They sent the angels to do that. Each angel had it’s codename, it’s symbol and it’s section.” She pointed the nine symbols. “They followed their instructions and destroyed the 9 parts of the city. With that the Führer thought that the Shinka were going to surrender, also he was going to give them time to think about it and stop the attacks. But 3 days after the 4 remaining parts were destroyed. The method in each city was the same, but the authors were never found. Katsuragi said that he was going to take revenge because after the attacks the angels suffered the consequences. Each of them lost a very important part of them. It could be their life, their career or their most loved ones. Sadly, it follows the Touka Koukan.”<br> “How can you say that, They didn’t killed one person, they killed too many! What they got isn’t equal!” said Yusuke. How can she be so cruel. She doesn’t understand.
“Yusuke you don’t understand…” she began
“No, you don’t understand!” yelled Yusuke.
“Helena, the angels killed too many people. Then some of them were killed. A death of one person doesn’t equal the death of thousands of people.” Kurama said.
“You still don’t understand. I know that it’s cruel. And for you it may not seem an equivalent state, but you have to listen me and don’t interrupt me.” Some of them nod, the rest just stared at her. “The Touka Koukan is the law of the worlds. You may not see it clearly, but it’s everywhere. It’s the law of truth. Think of it. The angels destroyed lives. Now their lives were destroyed. I may not know their names, but I do know this: 4 lost their entire families, 2 lost their careers and 3 were assassinated. I think that the ones who are alive are now regretting what they have done. Some may have lost themselves. Also there’s a fact that Koenma has forgot to tell you. Some Shinka are still alive. And now they are killing people. The massacre of Shinka happened 7 years ago and lasted a month . From that date till now there have been 3500 murders of alchemists and well that’s the quantity we know. Also their whole families have been executed. Civilians have been executed too. We think that those Shinka were the ones I fought hours ago. But I think their leader is still alive and works for someone who hates Alchemists. Apart from that, the 4 parts that were not attacked by the angels were the most populated areas in Shinka.”<br> “Yusuke, could you tell me what happened today?” Koenma asked.
“Why should I tell you, why don’t you ask her?” he said.
“We were completing our mission of protecting the group of 20 Reikai agents as you told us to. When we got to the reunion place where we were supposed to find the other agents we found out that it was a trap.” Kurama said and glared at Helena.
“There were no agents, but an Alchemist. She separated us from the group and we looked for them. We didn’t find them but we found Helena fighting with only one, the rest of them were dead.” said Kuwabara
“The onna killed them.” Hiei said.
This was enough
Helena burst out.
“For your information, shrimp, I killed them because they made me kill them.!” she yelled.
“What! You’re kidding!” Yusuke said.
“No, I’m not Craping kidding! Those people killed my officers! If you didn’t notice, there were 34 bodies, not 19! That means that others died. Also they were the reason she was killed!” she yelled.
“Who’s she?” asked Kuwabara
“It’s not your Craping business!” she spat.
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Post by Bri-chan on Jun 8, 2005 21:47:13 GMT -5
*claps* That was awesome! I feel sorry for Helena though... and the Shinka, and the angels who survived... *cries* It's only a few chapters in and it's already so tragic! I love it!
Hey, do you need any translations again? If you ever need them, I'll be happy to ask my grandpa.
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Post by Kuramafan06 on Jun 8, 2005 21:57:26 GMT -5
;D Thank you! I'm really glad that you liked it. And don't worry, the tragedy will continue. I'm not of those types of authors that make a tragic fic and in the end turn it into a "happy" fic and very corny or stupid. And thank you for your request. I was thinkiing about some phrases. Some of them are: +I love you. +Because I love him. +Farewell, Father... +Who are you? Maybe I'll think of some more later. Also I had this problem with the site. I always had more than 10 000 characters. That's what I get for writing too much. ;D
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